You should also cut those present-day humanity scenes shots, they're fitting nowhere in the main narrative. They're poorly, different resolution takes which aren't fitting within the rest of the movie's narration.
Somehow, I'd compare this with the 1992 Ron Fricke & Mark Magidson's "Baraka", but for that I give 10 of 10.
The commentary (pardon, Cate Blanchett, not her fault) is above my understanding in terms of how it fits with the visuals. Either it was scripted based on artistic or religious concepts (you can think of the Scriptures, Buddhism or even Thelema - if you want), you must accept is out-of sync with what you're seeing. It makes no sense.
So, hearing Malick dedicated ~ 40 years to this project, I'd say he should've done better with it.